- Hebah Solimanhas quoted8 days ago
cloud-like bedRepetitive:
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▪︎ descriptive imagery of the same bed repeated
Continued: see upcoming note - Hebah Solimanhas quoted8 days agocloud-like bed
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Repetitive:
▪︎exact wording used again in the same chapter
▪︎descriptive imagery of the same bed repeated - Hebah Solimanhas quoted15 days agoAsk anybody and they’ll tell you I’m the one who should’ve gone down in that plane instead of them.”
Emphasis Alternative: technically nothing wrong with sentence as is
"Ask anybody and they’ll tell you I’m the one who should’ve gone down in that plane instead of them.”
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▪︎ - Hebah Solimanhas quoted3 months ago! Really, you just never know what somebody like me will do next. I mean, I hardly ever even know myself.”
Problem with word order.
Doesn't sound quite right.
Change:
"....... I mean, I hardly ever even know myself."
To:
"....... I mean, even I hardly ever know myself."
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