We have a storage room, we have a wheat barrel. We smell Axe deodorant.
Menna Abu Zahrahas quoted4 years ago
sweeter than sap from a tree. Tangier than the juice from a nectarine.
Menna Abu Zahrahas quoted4 years ago
the heat she’s experiencing.
Menna Abu Zahrahas quoted4 years ago
So is she really black matter? No, but that’s how she’s feeling at the present. Are her palms really hot coals? No, but, again, those are things she’s experienced, so that’s how she’s describing
Menna Abu Zahrahas quoted4 years ago
My palms are two hot coals, scalding.
Menna Abu Zahrahas quoted4 years ago
These are some examples of similes. How about metaphor now? I’m black matter smeared in the hardwood. Stubble left on the maroon carpeting
Menna Abu Zahrahas quoted4 years ago
softer than I imagined. Like river water depositing pebbles on the quais.
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—like dandelions in a breeze.
Menna Abu Zahrahas quoted4 years ago
She doesn’t know what to make of him, so she relates these emotions that she’s unaccustomed to feeling to things she does understand. This method works well for many protagonists who are experiencing love for the first time. Watch for the similes in the following section (the use of “like” or “as”) where Tempeste likens what she’s feeling to something concrete from her past.
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it’s unsurprising that our main character experiences conflicting emotions.